Adria was locked in a dark but spacious room, just liked Bastille for the guilty nobles. Elaborate furnitures, the tablewares that made by silver and comfortable carpet. But nobody is happy if he or she is living in Bastille. She didn’t know where is the place she lived, aslo the time. Since she was born, her parents hided her into a basement to “protect her”, she had never been to the outside world for sixteen years. Everyday, her mother waked her up and brought her some pancakes with honey as the breakfast, tasted good, but it was not what she wanted. She could only eat the things that made by her mother, she never bring her the foods from the outside world. She wondered what is the outside world looks like? Well, she was used to lived in the room on her own, but as the age increase, the curiosity got stronger and stronger. The pictures on the wall were not what she wanted, she wanted some windows to look through. She could hear that children were playing and laughing, she could hear the dogs and the cars, the sounds just liked what she read on the books. She wanted a friend, she wanted a pet, she wanted to get out of this room so bad. She started to hate the room now.
it sounds like i am the first person who had made common on you story. i like you story because your story use all five senses really well
ReplyDeleteYour describe is so reality! I can still felt what Adria's thought about the room after I finish reading. I can't wait for know what Adria will do to find what she want!
ReplyDeletethis is a good exposition, you just written like a professional writer. you describe a lot about the girl expect to go to the outside world so badly. and you used the senses to make the audience understand easily from the story.
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